How's this story idea? Any suggestions, comments?

While thinking of an idea for a story, I remembered a idea I created about one or two years ago. I'd taken my dreams and written them down in a notebook, which then I'd try to develop them into sort-of-plots. Most of my dreams were just blah and were'nt very original, or I had forgotten most of them and only knew vague parts. The ones I did remember - well, most of them - were total duds. However, there was this one idea, that had stemmed from a dream, that I've sort of tinkered with and decided I might as well consider writing it out.

So, the man character will be a girl - thirteen - who develops the ability to Phase. This starts on the night of her thirteenth birthday, and it gets stronger as time goes on. She tries to keep this a secret, being as that she thinks she's going crazy, has doubts, and so on, but eventually she fades in front of her father/mother (not sure yet). She's thinking that she's having another 'episode', but then her father/mother reveals that well, he saw it too, and that she's not crazy, just developing special abilities.

Anyway, these people with 'special abilities' are what the people think are 'superheros' - superman, batman, the green lantern, those sort of heros. The inherited gene - or some genetical misshap or mutation - will cause these 'special abilities' to occur. I'm not sure what would originally cause this. Radiation, a expiremintal drug, maybe some science expirement gone wrong, I'll figure it out later.

Anyways, I do know this parent will have been some minor 'superhero'. Not Superman (Which was my first idea) or someone very well known. One with small powers.

I'm thinking there will be a special school for 'gifted' children. One that would be every day after school and train their 'powers' and such. You know, prepare them for a normal life and keeping their powers controled, while 'fighting crime' or helping the world in their own way sort of as a part-time job.

I do know that she'll go to the school, and that she'll either face a new enemy, some other enemy of her father's or such, or something else, such as an orginization, some world disaster, or maybe some other threat to the people or whatever.



1. Does it seem over-used, or sort of cliche? If so, what did?

2. What do you like or not like about it?

3. Any other suggestions to improve/ continue it?

4. Do you think I should change it to being a school/boarding school (maybe) that ends later then normal, and supplies them with normal studies as well as the abnormal?





Also, I had an idea of change while writing the plot/idea. How about that the 'school' sends out the older, more trained students sort of as spies? Like, to bring stuff, get information, or do something that the perosn's special abilities help them perform the task much more easily or that only they can do it? And they could be in legue with the CIA. Heck, then I would have to cross-out that whole 'offspring of superheros' thing. It would just have to be a genetic mutation.. or, I have another few ideas... Anyways, do you like it, or what?



Thanks in advance for answering my questions!~*How's this story idea? Any suggestions, comments?
I think you may have some writing ability because you described your ideas very well and didn't sound like a buffoon. That being said, your asking for honest answers here, all I could think about while reading above was this is the 'almost' plot of X-men, with alittle of the Incredibles thrown in for good measure. But I think you should keep going and would love to read something you've written. Good luckHow's this story idea? Any suggestions, comments?
It seems like it has been done before. The whole superhero thing?

Check out this link:

http://www.giftedseries.com/



If you make it a boarding school, I guess it could be different. Kind of like Hogwarts in Harry Potter?

Overall, I like the whole plot,

if you have time, can you answer mine?

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;鈥?/a>

thanks(: